Day-1 Gratitude Journal
It’s when my parents hug me. When I feel not secure, need protection or even feel sad, I normally look somebody to hug to make myself feel safe and secure. And there’s always my parents there ready to hug me anytime. The hug they give make me feel that I am under protection and calm me down especially when I am shivering or feeling nervous. Sometimes the feel not same with other than my parents.
📝 Komen Cikgu Suraya:
1. Comment: Your journal entry effectively addresses the prompt by sharing a personal experience that illustrates how your parents make you feel safe through their hugs. The emotional connection you describe is heartfelt and relatable, and it clearly conveys the sense of security you derive from their affection.
2. Improvement Suggestions: While your entry is meaningful, consider expanding on your thoughts to provide more detail. For example, you could describe a specific situation where a hug from your parents made a significant difference in how you felt. Additionally, pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity. For instance, you might say, “The hugs they give make me feel protected and calm, especially when I am shivering or feeling nervous.” This will help your writing flow better and convey your feelings more effectively. Keep up the great work, and continue to express your emotions through writing!